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some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Some people prefer to offer their kids many playthings without thinking about how
this
 affects the development of the children.In
this
 kind of behaviour of parents have many disadvantages, but I can say I find advantages too. Nowadays, parents are very busy
,
Accept space
,
all day long they are at the office and offering to their kids many toys they are trying to replace their physical lack.Another reason for too many toys in a house with children is the social media, all tv programmes have advertised about new toys or gadgets.The biggest problem is that children forgot to play outside, they become introverted and spoiled.If a
child
 gets everything that he wants, he will not value most of the toys and lose the interests on a toy and would like to have a new one.To spend so much money on toys does not help the kids in rather encourage parents to buy books at a very early age of the
child
.
However
, for a kid, it is important to have what to play with, to have dolls or machines in order to discover their personality by playing.
On the other hand
, toys can serve an educational purpose.There are a lot of playthings who teach children the ABC,
for example
, numbers, words in a foreign language.With
this
 king of toy, kids play and learn at the same time.Parents should establish some rules and do not let the children play all day long. In conclusion toys, play an important role in helping a
child
 s growth, but
also
 too many toys can affect children s psychological development negatively.Parents should offer a reasonable number of toys and the right for the every
child
in particular
.
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