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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

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In order to benefit the state of the
mind
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, some people suggest solving word riddles or reading books during free
time
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. Another popular thought is that it is paramount to reserve
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time
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 for
relaxation
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 of the
mind
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.
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 essay will discuss both viewpoints and explain why I believe that it is better to stay mentally active. Occupying the
brain
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 with different tasks helps to keep it sharp and focused even at old age. Leisure
time
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 activities do not strain one's thought process as there is no pressure in solving riddles or reading for
relaxation
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. At the same
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,
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 activity helps to prevent or postpone age-related
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 diseases. One extensive research on Alzheimer's disease,
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, compared patients who kept the high intensity of intellectual activity throughout their lives and those who did not. The former group showed the symptoms of the disease much later in life and they were less severe. It is
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 true that after hard intense periods of hard mental work a period of
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 is beneficial.
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Similarly
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 to muscles that become sore after exercising, the
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 gets tired after hard mental activities. Periods of low mental output help to recharge it or the breakdown can occur.
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, many office workers in Japan take
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 to the extreme as in the pursuit of
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mind
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mind, relaxation
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 they resort to heavy drinking after work hours.
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 gives them so needed abstinence from thoughts about their jobs that they cannot achieve by milder methods anymore. In conclusion,
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let
 the
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 to relax during leisure
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 helps it to recharge, but puzzles and reading can keep it healthy in the long run.
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, in my opinion, it is better to use leisure
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 for resting the
brain
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 by exercising it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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