Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on the society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Money circulation among individuals is unequal everywhere. In some countries,
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difference is attributed to celebrities who have been major influences for a long time;
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, the difference is even more significant in some nations with few people having big
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some argue that celebrities who work in the entertainment word badly affect our civilization and should be paid less, others consider that they are reasonably remunerated because of their positive effect in
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. Both
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the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
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will be discussed in the following lines. The existence of superstars
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as actors, football players, singers, and movie stars has become wider since they entertain the public by taking them out from boredom and monotony. They inspire people, motivate, and build in the public a sense of hope through films, songs, concerts, and games;
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, they are influencing new generations in many positive ways because they not only just stand in front of a screen in order to brighten people's day, but
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invest a lot of money on brands, and many of them donate to charity organizations. A prime example of
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we have Angelina Jolie and Mohammed Salah the former who has a philanthropic role in alleviating the suffering of refugees and the latter who promoted an advertising campaign which resulted in a major increase in the number of phone calls of addicted teenagers who requested a medical intervention.
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, it can be said that public figures have an effective impact on
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, doctors, engineers or professor,
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have a positive impact on public, and I considered
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even greater since aspects
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as education and health have always been a priority for a humanity that lacks these two characteristics. Notwithstanding, taking into consideration the aforementioned notions, some public figures may have some disadvantages in culture. In some movies the hero of a movie tries to make deals with the evil or the gangs which normally kill each other; many youngsters reproduce these scenes which are reflected in their behaviour and in their personalities causing the
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of young criminals;
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, the example of
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movies is constantly related to the ideas of wars, violence, terrorism and so on.
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social issue is explained in a study of "young influenced" by the sociology department, who highlighted that the famous Egyptian actor Mohamed Ramadan well-known for his roles in many violent movies has negatively impacted the new generation's behaviour,
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, the number of crimes in the rural district has been significantly increased. With
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in mind, it is considered ridiculous to pay thousands and thousands of dollars to celebrities who sometimes are looking forward to getting their own benefits without caring about the well-being of
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. In conclusion, both the subject of controlling high salaries and the impact of celebrities has been discussed; even though some believe that famous people must deserve to be well paid because of they strive to bring happiness, others including myself, understand that the distributions of the money must be done by analyzing which
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branches are more relevant than others in terms of social development;
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, it is the
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which attracts me's prolonged interest since celebrities are members of the culture that of course have gone to great lengths in some social issues, but who have
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provoked other more dangerous.
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