Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing for example through cell phone tracking and security cameras. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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In today’s world, there is an increase in the use of new technology which monitors people through their
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phones and
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cameras. Most of the times, people are even unaware about being monitored. In my opinion, I believe that monitoring by the Government is far more advantageous that its detrimental effects. The
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keeps public safe in public places by stopping any threat.
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, the increase in
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through cameras has stopped a lot of threats which would
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have been unnoticed. As the cameras are being installed in public places,
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as malls, streets, and even public gatherings have the advantage that every moment is tracked and is a very effective deterrent for the criminals who tend to do opportunistic crimes in public places.
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,
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due to security cameras on the traffic light has effectively reduced accidents.
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, people have started to be more conscious while driving because if caught on the camera, it will result in getting a ticket. Another, a main monitoring technology
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most often and easily used is the
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phone tracking. By using the data of travel activity and location has helped to solve a large number of crime mysteries.
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the crimes
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, kidnaping has stopped and solved by tracking the criminals
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phone by using the
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phone towers locations and
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, saving many precious lives
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is providing a platform for the security agencies to stop the crime from happening. In conclusion, I think that monitoring people without their knowledge provides a path to reduce crime and importantly helps in reducing threats.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Surveillance
  • 2. Monitoring
  • 3. Cell phone tracking
  • 4. Security cameras
  • 5. Public safety
  • 6. Law enforcement
  • 7. Privacy concerns
  • 8. Personal freedom
  • 9. Autonomous
  • 10. Breach of trust
  • 11. Misuse of information
  • 12. Institutional integrity
  • 13. Psychological impact
  • 14. Mental well-being
  • 15. Societal trust
  • 16. Paranoia
  • 17. Transparency
  • 18. Stringent regulations
  • 19. Criminal deterrence
  • 20. Apprehension of criminals
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