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Some people think it is better to impose higher tax on unhealthy food as this will motivate people to eat healthy food, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One way of promising a healthy eating habit among people is by taxing unhealthy
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 and drinks.
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, we shall discuss about the benefits and drawbacks on imposing a tax on unhealthy
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. With the rise in diabetes and obesity, many public
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 experts believe that government should impose a tax on unhealthy
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 and drinks. Some of those unhealthy ingredients that should be made taxable includes fat, saturated fat, sugar, salt, caffeine and artificial sweeteners. Sugar in foods and drinks contributed to obesity, diabetes and other conditions. By increasing the price of products that contain sugar, taxes can get people to consume less of them ad
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 improve nutrition and
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. The government could put the resulting revenue to good use, perhaps by helping low income family or cutting other taxes.
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 the downsides of
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 should be considered too. Taxes are imposed real cost to consumers who pay taxes or switch to other options that may be more expensive, less enjoyable or less convenient. That burden would be particularly large for low income families. Another issue is how well
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 cost and risks. If discouraging something harmful, taxes, work best when there is a tight relationship between the 'dose' that gets taxed and the 'response' of concern. The dose response relationship
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 across individuals depending on their metabolism, lifestyle and
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. Taxes cannot capture that variation. That limits what taxes alone can accomplish.
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, people may switch to other
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 and drinks that are
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, In my opinion, it is vital to understand how potential taxes affect entire diet, not just consumption of certain products.
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