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it is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should focus on people in their own countries. to what extent do you agree or disagree

Many people claim that the governments should look after their own citizens
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 of people from other parts of the world which is agreed by many people all over the world by that way, safety can be achieved.
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 with, taking care of people in a specific country is the duty of every government to prevent many disasters like an increasing number of homeless people in local communities that leads to living under bridges or in metro stations. In
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 case, it should assist the citizens by providing shelter and free food.
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, the number of unemployed people is increasing with high rate
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, authorities should take care of unemployment seriously to reduce the number of jobless people.
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 reduces effectively crime rates resulting from lack money, which make their country safer.Another purpose of the governments is to improve the living standard of their own countries. On the opposite hand, people who migrate or even visit other countries should be taken into account
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 is because we are all humans and from humanity, we should help each other in anytime anyone needs help so I think that the government should be responsible for the people who are only in their own boarder only even if that person is of other nationality. To add, there are some problems that need the cooperation of all nations, if a country rejects to cooperate,
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 massive problems we will face like climate change which leads to global warming and other disasters In a nutshell,there must be prio
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ities for the government, the citizens
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 other co
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first, then
 they cannot serve people all over the world in one go and it should not leave them when they need help.

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