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Some people think that computers are more of a hindrance than a help in today’s society. Others believe that they are such indispensable tools that we would not be able to live or work without them. Discuss both opinions and give yours.

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Nowadays some people think that computers are an obstacle in society, others believe that we cannot live without them. I believe that computers are very useful, but we should not
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omputers have found a permanent place in the world of work. In my opinion they have made our lives easier and convenient in numerous ways.
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, computers can bring some disadvantages in fact they reduce social life. Game and other applications installed on computers can be addictive. Lots of young people prefer to spend their time at home in front of a computer than socialize, they live in the world of games isolated from the real one. If the individual time is spent excessively on accessing the internet, there will be a shortage of real conversation.
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 them incorrectly they can be a hindrance than a help.I firmly believe that computers are very important in people’s lives, but there should be some limitations to
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