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Some modern artist receive huge sums of money for the things they create while others struggle to survive Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation To what extent do you agree or disagree

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When coming to modern artists, it is always assumed that they are affluent;
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, the reality is not a nice dream, some of them may have trouble making for
living
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a living
. While it is suggested by some that the
government
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 should take action to solve
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 problem, I am on the side that it is a personal issue, and there is no involvement with the
government
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. Generally, it is adequate to receive wages that deserve an artist’s effort and dedication. Imagine that there are artists who work hard and always
make
engage in
do
 their best to working on themselves, so they are worth being well-known with a lot more job opportunities and certainly a high-paid salary. The obvious contradict cases are those reply on their innate talent and do not work on that gift;
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, they certainly earn less money than those both are hardworking and versatile.
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, it will lead to an unfair situation if governments try to involve in.
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, the expectation in the field of art is the same as other professions. It is apparent that in every career path there are successors and losers, the deserved rewards always belong to those spent their most time working. Naturally, slow-moving workers will be making less income compared to delicate employees. For
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 reason, once the
government
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 tries to solve the unfair situation in the field of art, it inevitably leads to other serious unjustified issues in other professions. In conclusion,
the high
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the higher
higher
 income is a reflection of an artist’s dedication and hard work, so the existing unfair situation is a natural matter, and
government
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 involvement is not necessary. From my perspective, no matter you are working in which occupation, you all need to be hard-working and enhance your working productivity to compete in
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 competitive world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic disparity
  • Market demand
  • Public visibility
  • Artistic merit
  • Equitable distribution
  • Government intervention
  • Free market
  • Bureaucratic complications
  • Social and economic inequalities
  • Targeted government assistance
  • Wider reforms
  • Commercial viability
  • Niche audiences
  • Financial rewards
  • Systemic issues
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