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Nowadays, many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of life. However, only a few achieve it. What are the problems in doing this and also mention the solutions to this?

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In the 21st century, everyone is using technology to communicate. Many companies are now able to run their meetings online. In my opinion, being able to do online business meetings gives us many more advantages than disadvantages. One of the obstacles is the technical problems. In many developing countries, internet service is not stable, or there is a problem in the program they are using. The internet connection could shut down while the meeting is running, which will be causing interference and wasting
time
. Some managers do not like to have an online meeting because they do not know how to manage
this
 kind of meeting.
For example
, there is a lack of eye contact with others, which is very important to them.
In contrast
, having an online meeting comes with many financial benefits, as
this
 will cost less than a regular meeting, whereas the companies do not have to provide a meeting room, or food or drink for the members.
Also
,
this
 kind of reception will save
time
. The members do not have to dress up and drive to the meeting place. All members will be
in
Suggestion
at
 the meeting on
time
 wherever they are.
In addition
, these days anyone can get any kind of online training from any institution around the world with no abroad travel. In conclusion, I believe that we should take benefits from technology efforts and go over any obstacles to get the best result in a short
time
 with fewer efforts. Running business meetings and training online is an example of using technology to make life easier.
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