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The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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It is no doubt that the Internet is increasingly one of the irreplaceable communication means. People keep in touch each other through the way the Internet offering. It brings people closer by using the Internet lines. A cooperation arranging a meeting over the Net where its staff can debate the policy of the company. People argue that the Internet has adjusted the way people interact via the same model. I pretty agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, most
people especially
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people, especially
 children, relax and attend leisure activities by using the Internet. They mainly stay at home and watch movies which are being downloaded from entertainment websites. They prefer to register and become a
membership
Suggestion
member
 of a virtual social network
such
 as
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
 or blogs where they can discuss specific aspects of daily life. Even though, they
makes
Suggestion
make
 friends and live as if they are living in the real life.
In addition
 to
this
, foreign students usually keep in touch with their relatives through webcam, a service provided by the Internet. In goes without saying that the invention of the
world
 wide web has brought a huge impact on the economy operation of the
world
. In the past, it took ages for a company to communicate or send a contract to the customers oversea. Today, we send or receive an
e-mail
(computer science) a system of world-wide electronic communication in which a computer user can compose a message at one terminal that can be regenerated at the recipient's terminal when the recipient logs in
email
 in seconds. The international companies manage their operation economically due to the advantages of the Internet. They can hold a meeting where staff members of branches all over the
world
 discuss a business strategy or present a financial report to the general director who is far away from them. In conclusion, the Internet plays an important role in the
last
 century.We appreciate it. It has more or less changed our lifestyle. How to take advantage of it and promote it in order to make the
world
 more prosperous is the question we may concern.
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