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Some say that main environmental problems of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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FOR A STABLE AND MEANINGFUL LIFE, ENVIRONMENT PLAYS A VITAL ROLE IN EVERY LIVINING ANIMALS WATHER IT IS HUMAN OR OTHER
SPECIES
. THERE ARE CERTAIN PEOPLE WHO CLAIM THAT THE VANISING OF
SUCH
SPECIES
 ARE THE THE MAJOR DETRIMENTAL IMPACT ON SURROUNDING. WHILE, OTHER THINKS THAT THERE ARE MYRIAD OF ISSUES PRESENT OTHER THAN DISTINCTION OF PLANTS AND ANIMALS.
FIRSTLY
,
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS WHY THERE IS A LOSS OF DIVERT PLANTS AND ANIMALS AND SECONLDY, WHAT ARE THE OTHER MAJOR ISSUES
THAT IS
 RESPONSIBLE FOR THE SAME. ON THE ON SIDE, AS SOME
SPECIES
 HELPS TO BALANCE THE OXYGEN AND CARBON DIOXIDE LEVEL IN THE AIR ANS SOME ANIMALS USED TO BE FOOD FOR OTHER
SPECIES
 ACCORDING TO THE LIFE CYLCE.
HENCE
, NOWADAYS, CARBBON DIOXIDE IS INCREASED AND OXYGEN HAS DECLINED IN THE AIR. CONSEQUENTL, THOSE WHO DO NOT THE FOOD THEY DIE.
THIS
 HOW NOWADAYS THE LOSS OF
SPECIES
 AND ANIMALS CONSIDERED AN MAJOR MENACE FOR SOME. ON THE OTHER SIDE, OTHER THAN LOSS OF
SPECIES
 OF PLANTS AND ANIMALS, deterioration IS THE MAJOR CONCERN FOR NOW, AS LOT OF PEOPLE PREFFERED TO COMMUTE THROUGH OWN VEHICLE.
THEREFORE
, THE SURGE IN THE NUMBER OF VEHIVLE ON THE ROLE
ALSO
 INCREASE THE AIR AND NOICE deterioration.
THIS
 POLLUTION HAVE DEVASTATING EFFECT ON THE HUMAN AND OTHER LIVINING ANIMAL'S HEALTH THAT COULD RESULT IN LOSSING REST OF LIVELIHOOD.
FOR INSTANCE
, AS PER THE AUSTRALIAN WEATHER DEPARMENT, THE POLLUTION LEVEL HAS REACHED TO ITS PEAK LEVEL THAN A DECADE AGO DUE TO THE INCREASED NUMBER OF VEHICLE. IN CONSLUSION, VARIOUS PLANTS AND ANIMALS INDEED BE AN ASSET TO MANTAIN NATURAL PROGRESS OF THE ENVIRONMENT. BUT, IS IS NOT ONLY THE ANIMAL AND PLANT WHO RESPONSIBLE FOR THE DAMAGE TO IT.
ALTHOUGH
, HUMAN SHOULD UNDERSTAND THE IMPORTANCE OF EACH CREATIVITY OF THE NATURE TO KEEP SAFE AND SECURE THE WORLD.
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