Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, Explain that you would like to apply for the job. Give some details of any relevent experience that you have. specify days and times that would suit you.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to apply for the waiter server position in your company. My name is Aji, and I would like to apply
the
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position
being
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a
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of
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waiter in your Restaurant, I
came
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know
this
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information about the
occopation
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occasion
from the website, I read fully the information on my phone and
then
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I feel exiting
with
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your
Coffeeshop
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coffee shop
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.
Besides
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, I
was graduation
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from my university
that
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my major is tourism.
Farthermore
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Furthermore
, It is
perfect
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the perfect
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position for me
being
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to be
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waiter
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a waiter
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or handle guests in front of your Restaurant. As mentioned in the requirement, I believe that I am eligible to work
under
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at
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your Hotel. Alongside, I have experience
become
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as become
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waiters
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in one of the famous Villa in Gili Trawangan for
the
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two years.
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why, I can be able to join
with
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your staff at your cafe. In
additional
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, I have skills
such
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as
speak
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English so I can blether with
foregn
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foreign
.
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, explain
them
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to them
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the menu or tell the guests the story of your company because it is crucial for
keep
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the good name
your
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of your
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firm. I am available for the next weeks because I am going to
other
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Bali island
for
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take my document at my Campus. Please let me know if you need more details. I look forward to your prompt reply, Yours sincerely, Aji

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to begin with a proper greeting, like 'Dear Manager,' and a clear closing like 'Thank you.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear and simple sentences. Some sentences are a bit long and hard to follow.
task achievement
Make your experience and skills clearer, explaining how they relate to the job.
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Check your grammar and spelling to improve the overall quality of your writing.
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You explained your experience as a waiter clearly, which is a strong point.
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You showed enthusiasm for the job, which is great to see.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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