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Nowadays many people work part or full time from home. Some people say that working from home has many benefits while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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In the modern life, there are new policies and guidelines that mandate firms
to give
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give
 the right to their employees to perform jobs outside the office. Some people adopt the stance that it has
merits
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merit
, while others believe that it has demerits. I personally agree that remote work will have more negatives on the organization itself. In the following lines,
both
 the positives and negatives will be thoroughly discussed along with my point of view. On one hand, some men and women are of the belief that working full day from an apartment has myriad merits and it has become quintessential nowadays for
both
 employers and employees.
In other words
, employers will avoid
cost
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the cost
 of facilities and overhead
such
 as electricity.
Additionally
, workers will have a flexible schedule as they can engage more with their families or friends in free times.
This
 is exemplified by universities which provide the online courses of
master’s degree
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the master’s degree
;
both
 learners and teachers will join video conference learning sessions without having to hold face to face ones.
Hence
, a lot of individuals in the society think that working from home has advantages in the meantime.
On the other hand
, despite the merits previously mentioned, some public opinions are argued that working either complete or incomplete hours out of the office has its demerits. To put in another way, remote work is a security risk to the
enterprise especially
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enterprise, especially
 if the data is leaked. From
business perspective
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a business perspective
, causes of worry for any enterprise in general are data leaks and employees stealing data.
Therefore
, it is recommended for any institute to install an antivirus and VPN on worker’s laptops and personal computers. Having shown
both
 aspects, it can be concluded that working outside the office has its merits and demerits. I strongly agree that
negatives
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the negatives
 of remote work outweigh positives. It is believed that worrying about organization data security is a good reason to want employees to stick
to
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with
 co-located offices.
Submitted by Mohamed Abdel Wanis on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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