Your are living in a university residence, and you have a problem with the high levels  of Boise a letter campus restaurant Wich is open until midnight Write a letter to the governor of The University.In your letter

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to formally complain about the noise generated by the restaurant, which is open until midnight. I am a student living in the University residence, and I feel it is important to bring these issues to your attention in order to preserve the reputation of our esteemed university. Allow me to explain the problems in detail. The first issue I would like to address is the noise created by the restaurant, particularly
due to
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its late operating hours. The loud music,
along with
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people talking and laughing, disrupts the peace and quiet of the area.
As a result
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, the lack of sleep is negatively affecting my academic performance and mental well-being. Many students are experiencing similar stress and discomfort because of the noise. I would be grateful if the restaurant could consider reducing its operating hours, closing by 10 p.m.
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of midnight.
This
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change would greatly improve the living environment for students and ensure a more conducive atmosphere for studying and rest. I look forward to your response and hope for a resolution to
this
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issue. Yours faithfully, Tom Dillinger

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task achievement
Consider expanding on your arguments or providing specific examples of how the noise impacts your daily life for a more compelling case.
coherence
Try to use more linking words to improve the flow between your ideas, which could enhance the overall coherence.
coherence
Make sure that each paragraph clearly focuses on just one main idea - although you did well in this area, a bit more clarity could help.
task achievement
You have addressed the recipient respectfully and maintained a formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this context.
coherence
The structure of the letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
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