The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of reasons why American citizens travelled, and the pie chart compares the proportion of main problems they faced in the year 2009. It is clear from the bar graph that the US people mainly travelled because of commuting to and from work in 2009.

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, the cost of travelling is the most common

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year. In 2009, the percentage of trips in the US for commuting was highest, at 49%,

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the figure for the purpose of visiting friends or relatives was significantly lower, at only 6% of the total trips. Travelling for shopping reasons and personal reasons made up 16% and 19% of all travel in the US respectively, compared to 10% of social or reaction trips. In the same year, the proportion of individuals in the US concerned the price of travelling was higher than other problems, at 36%.

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space for pedestrians and access to public transport accounted for the

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rates, at only 6% and 8% respectively. Meanwhile, 19% of American

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thought that safety was

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important travel issue,

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the figure for highway congestion was 17% of

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public.

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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save their money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree?