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Buying things on the internet, such asbooks, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is certainly true that purchasing things on the Internet is becoming more and more famous.
However
, there are more merits to
this
 than demerits , which I will be discussing both. Buying goods online on the internet is way easier and is highly popular right now.
This
 is because of the availability of
products
. Each and every
product
 is always abundant when surfing online.
Due to
 the large variety of
products
, one can find everything he or she is looking for.
As a result
, the customer has no issue finding the
product
 they are looking for. Plus, It is not time-consuming as the
products
 are always present.
Also
, we will have detailed
product
 descriptions, reviews and ratings
due to
 which it will become more clear on which
product
 to get. Unfortunately, there are some cons to buying
products
 online. There will always be a lack of examination for the
product
 when an individual is purchasing it.
Furthermore
, the time taken for the item to be delivered may not be up to par as indicated on the website
while
 purchasing.
Moreover
, the packaging of the
product
 might be restless and there could be a high chance of your item being damaged. Plus, people tend to look for sites with
products
 that have cheaper rates.
As a result
, they get scammed, by being sent something completely different and damaged. In conclusion, there are way more merits than demerits to buying goods online and
this
 is why it is becoming more and more famous.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a good framework for your essay.
task achievement
The essay comprehensively addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping, showing a balanced view.
task achievement
Detailed product descriptions, reviews, and ratings were effectively mentioned as advantages of online shopping.

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