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In many parts of the world, children are given more freedom in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Across the globe, countries, young generations are given more flexibility while comparatively in the past recent years. In “parents makes a foundation wall to raise their sons and daughters on a good path and there behind the behaviour of the career”. In easy shall discuss the both merits and demerits on child's priorities and I will conclude with my opinion on it. Society has the largest impact on children manners. For suppose parents allowed the child to make a connection with society without control, the children will be going to make relations with anyone in the community. Children do not have well-experienced in their lives and it leads to bad situated on the main sources of the drug crime. The psychological people found that was the highest percent of the crimes with children who lived in the same area and leads to have the drugs. These results show the negative impact on society. There many advantages of teens enjoying the power. They grow up quicker than their parents did. From produces more liberal, mature, and adventurous adults, which is the amalgamation of the good points in the career path. It implies the countries are very rapidly increasing the traditional growth rate. In India, if today’s youngsters want a dowry free marriage, he will go ahead and have it against all odds. To up the nutshell, it can be reiterated that immunity enjoyed by children is, by and large, a knowledgeable activity participant, but the onus is on the parents to prepare them for in small steps, so that the negative side of excess right does not go against them.
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