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Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past.what are the caurses and solutions of this problem

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A generation ago, people were respected by younger people as a part of the cultural systems
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,
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 beautiful
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 has been changed in recent time.
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 essay will look at the core reasons for the same and propose solid solutions. One of the main causes of the problem is the disintegration of the joint families in the
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, in the
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 decade, there were plenty of joint families and children were taught by their grandparents about the value and ethics of life. Younger generation miss
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 opportunity. The solution is to encourage joint family
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 of the contemporary nuclear family
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 consist only parents and children. Another problem is that nowadays, the public is setting a goal, hard work and achieve it.
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 nobody thinks about any humanity. In
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 situation morality has taken a back seat and individual hesitate to express their respect to others. The way forward could be as a social being everyone need to be social with others.
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, including subjects like moral science would enhance the humanity of students and
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 the
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 in future. A
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 cause of the problem is the influence of the western culture in the
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. To be more precise, as the western countries people take care of their own matter and live independent as much as they can.
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, they would not worry about
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 and its
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.To tackle
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 issue, many programmes can be provided through media to highlight the good things about respecting others.It would affect the
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 a lot. To sum up, people think there is no need to be polite and respect others.The causes of
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 mindset are absence of joint family
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, the influence of western culture and of course the truth that anybody can achieve anything with hard work.
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 can be resolved by an institution of joint families, upgrading the school syllabus by adding moral subjects and valuable programmes about humanity through the media.My view is that the main responsibility lies with older members of the
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 and local authorities in education.

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