Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat. Do you agree or disagree?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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obesity
genetics
socio-economic status
nutritional education
physical activity programs
adverse effects
mental health issues
responsibility sharing
implementation
privileged families
supportive environment
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Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?