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Some people feel that school should teach children how to be good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What skills people need to be a good parent?

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Many people believe that
school
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 should incorporate a subject on how to become a good
parent
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. I,
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, completely disagree with
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 opinion as providing academic education is the primary obligation of schools and adolescents are not much capable to understand the role and responsibility of families. Having a friendly
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 and becoming a good human being is the essential skills which all people require to be a good
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. The predominant reason why I oppose the view that children should not be taught any skills in schools on becoming a
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 is that schools are
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 responsible for giving academic knowledge. To elucidate, children are sent to
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 to be educated so that they become successful in their life,
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 as by having a good job or being entrepreneurial, astronaut, engineer, by choosing a different preferred realm. Another cause is they are not mature enough to learn good parenting subjects. Adolescent age is the tender age of learning education and acquiring unique skills. If they are taught in
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 that how to be a good
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, which is undoubtedly essential in later life, they will distract from their actual motive of academic education as they already have a lot of stain of extra subjects. There are various skills which every
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 should have.
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, they should have friends
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 with their children. Having free and sharing
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, a
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 can be closer to their children and they are less inclined to anything from their parents.
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, being a good human being is the skill which I think all parents must consist of. By being a good
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 they can set an example for them so that their children would not deny adopting the qualities, like respecting elder, good moral values and ethics. In conclusion,
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 some argue that parenting subject should be introduced in the
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 curriculum, I completely disagree as making children educated is the preliminary duty of
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 and psychologically immature to understand parenting subjects. Being a good human and friendly
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 is crucial qualities to be a good
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