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Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is sometimes argued that in recent years, young generations have a tendency to idolize sports celebrities. While I agree that not all famous
sportspeople
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sports people
 could become role models, I would argue that the majority could have a positive impact on youngsters. There are several reasons why sports figures could not set a good example for young adults.
This
 could be because some famous athletes have negative
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 which cause unacceptable influences on young people.
For instance
, these celebrities who have money to burn show a propensity for splurging their money on luxuries, which make the youth imitate their idols and spend money like water.
Furthermore
, a few sports stars foster over-competitive spirits among young generations due to their win-at-all-costs attitudes
such
 as swearing or creating conflicts with their opponents, resulting in uncontrolled aggression in the youth.
However
, despite of the aforementioned adverse causes, I would argue that well-known sportsmen still have a beneficial effect on young people.
First
, young adults could pick up many good qualities from sportsmen who they idolize. Take Cristian Ronaldo, who is one of the most reputable football players in the world,
for example
. In spite of not being appreciated as high natural talent as his colleagues, he still
become
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becomes
 an outstanding football legend with incredible records thanks to his personal effort and determination in the dedication of training.
This
 is a source of motivation and inspiration for youngsters to always strive and make attempts on the track of achievements.
In addition
, with constant training regimes, sports professionals have an
attractive athletic
Accept comma addition
attractive, athletic
 body, which kindles young adults’ interest in physical activities.
As a result
, young people who look up to the athletes would take up regular exercises
such
 as a specific sport or even an alternative form of exercise, which makes contribution to keep fit and stay healthy in the future. In conclusion,
although
 the young could not take all sports stars as their models, I believe that the celebrities influence
actively
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acting
in
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on
 the youth.
Submitted by Tran Vy Khanh Vo on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admire
  • role model
  • excellence
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • cheating
  • misconduct
  • critical evaluation
  • guidance
  • positive influence
  • negative influence
  • inspiration
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