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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the Internet, museums are not needed anymore to what extent. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, everything can be found on the
internet
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, some believe that museums are becoming redundant because cultural and historical
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 is available online.
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 essay will argue why museums are extremely important to preserve
knowledge
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 despite having
most
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more information
information
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 available online.
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 with, the colossal amounts of
information
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 on the
internet
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 contain
knowledge
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 of almost everything in the world, because of which, many think that museums have lost their importance and are unnecessary. They have a justifiable reason to believe
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 since the details of all historical events, and cultural facts and figures can now be found at a click of a button on websites like Wikipedia.
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, with the growing sedentary lifestyle, some prefer to gain
knowledge
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 from a computer screen rather than walking around in a
museum
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. Due to these reasons, museums are becoming increasingly unpopular.
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, the
internet
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 does not provide the practicality or the
experience
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 a
museum
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 can give and due to
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museums
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museum
 are a very important part of the society. Most people
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have not visited
 museums just to acquire
knowledge
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 but to live the
experience
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 and to be amazed by having centuries-old historical items in front of them. Having the
experience
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 to observe or in some cases touch a genuine piece of history cannot be gained from the
internet
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.
In addition
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 to
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, many websites provide tempered facts and figures which are not easily verifiable. People can gain
knowledge
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 while experiencing the historical events when they visit a
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museum which
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museum, which
 cannot be emulated on a computer screen. To conclude,
This
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 essay argued why the
internet
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 cannot replace the importance of museums, even though it contains most of the
information
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. In my opinion, museums are a crucial part of society, and in spite of having most details about history and culture available online, the
internet
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 cannot provide the
experience
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 a
museum
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 can give.

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