Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Transportation is an essential part of the nation.
Although
, there are many incidents happening on the runway because of lack of knowledge of driving rules and so on.
Thus
, some people deem that the government should limit the
age
who can
drive
some vehicles.
However
, I am not totally satisfied with given concern and gives my detailed explanation
further
in an essay. My
first
and foremost, the point regarding to give phenomenon is Increased consumption of alcohol among adults cause most of the road accidents.
For instance
, a report published by a local news channel shows that about 40% accident are recorded because of drunk and
drive
.
However
, The administration should make strict legislation on that.
In addition
, Automotive manufacturing company's should Invent some technology.
Thus
, vehicles can detect the alcohol level in a person's body and if it exceeds than the deadline, Car automatically may stop the ignition system of an engine.
Furthermore
, the government should increase the penalty of who commit
this
or make the prison sentence for
such
irrelevant behaviour.
On the other hand
, assigning
age
restriction to
drive
. Children under
age
of 18 can not
drive
because the maturity level at that
age
is not enough to
drive
on the road.
Moreover
, the government should
also
limit the
age
of elderly people who has less vision and suffering from heart related disease.
Furthermore
, authorities should make some pre-driving coaching classes without that no one can get a licence.
As a result
, the new drivers can get enough knowledge how to safe
drive
may decrease the amount of accidents. To summerize, From my point of view only limit the
age
can not increase road safety.
However
, the authorities should make some strict law to prevent
this
.
Submitted by pd57062 on

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next: