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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, other believe that individuals also can do some things to solve these problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few people believe that environmental disasters are greater than what individuals could tackle while some believe that individuals can still contribute their own quota to solve
this
 trending challenge. In
this
 essay, both views would discuss extensively, and my opinion would be clearly stated.
To begin
 with, challenges faced by people in their respective communities are enormous, but can be tackled through cooperation and adhering to rules and regulations. " No challenge is insurmountable ". Youth in the community should take responsibility and desist from awful habits
such
 as depositing trash in rivers or drainages which will in turn block drainages and cause flooding.
This
 is
also
 a major disaster, and has rendered many families homeless.
Moreover
, the Government should prioritise environmental problems and allocate a significant amount to it in the budget,
subsequently
,
this
 will suffice and relief residents from the hardship they undergo.
Furthermore
, there should be stringent rules and stiffer punishment for perpetrators of environmental problems
such
 as pollution.
For instance
, burning of refuse which affect the climate and cause green house effects,
also
 throwing of empty bottles in rivers.
For instance
, offenders could be made to pay fine or serve jail term to serve as
deterrent
Suggestion
a deterrent
 to others
.
Accept space
.
Apparently, they are the major cause of these problems. In my own opinion, both youths and Government have major roles to play, but I think individuals should not be destructive and take charge in order not to sabotage their leader's efforts. In conclusion, we should not flout Government orders and ensure proper hygiene and
also
 we should maintain a high level of decorum. ." Cleanliness is
next
 to Godliness" and "prevention is better than cure"
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  • interconnected
  • globalization
  • remote work
  • independence
  • dependency
  • specialization
  • professional services
  • social validation
  • individualism
  • self-reliance
  • collective action
  • sustainability
  • global community
  • navigating
  • complexity
  • environmental movement
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