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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Money plays a vital role in today's livelihood. People earn and wanted to spend on them.
Although
, there is nothing wrong in it as we are earning for ourselves only, but
on the other hand
 it is essential for an individual to pay some portion as a tax to run the economy. I disagree with the statement stating that to keep all the money that they earned. There are several reasons for it. Paying taxes will help the government to regulate the economy by paying off country’s debts.
Moreover
, it
also assist
Suggestion
also assists
 them in developing infrastructure
such
 as building roads, providing free education and medical facilities
,
Accept space
,
 paying salaries to government employees working for public or public health workers. These all facilities can be provided if the government receive their income through tax payers.
In addition
 to it, it
also
 helps in smooth running of the country by investing the surplus amount into some profitable ventures.
Furthermore
, few nations
also
 provide the old age people with the pension scheme after certain age limit
such
 as Canada.
On the other hand
, it is not evident that the major portion of the income should be contributed.
Instead
 a reasonable percentage should be contributed as the families
also
 have to fulfil their basic necessities like food, shelter and clothing. On the top of it, some
also wishes
Suggestion
also wish
 to get luxuries or a few focus towards savings for the future, which can be possible with the extra income or leftover amount only. In the nutshell, a proportionate amount of salary should be contributed to the economy to get country developing.
Submitted by MAYANK MAKKAR on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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