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Children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore, sports lessons must be compulsory in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days young people aren’t very physically active. They often stay at home or play computer games or are on social media because nowadays all children have
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 has made them lazy and homeless. In my opinion, they should at least exercise at
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 to make up for their inactivity. So I agree that children should do sports lessons at
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 essay I will explain why. I think the main reason why young people are less active is their parents, because they don’t allow their children to play outside because of less social security than in the past.
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, despite the new electronic devices, families are entertaining children at home so that they do not go out.
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 because it harms the health of children and when they get older, they may suffer from illness and unfit.
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, parents should at least pay attention to their children’s sport lessons at
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 and encourage them to exercise. To sum up, we know children who do sports will be fitter and healthier, so exercise should be very important in
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, and a lot of time should be spent to have an athletic and healthy youth in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical exercise
  • holistic development
  • mental well-being
  • academic performance
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • leadership skills
  • life skills
  • cognitive function
  • academic learning
  • resources
  • facilities
  • community partnerships
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