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It ıs generally believed that some people are born with certain talants,for instance for sport or music,and others are not.However,ıt is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
The definition of
talent
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 varies from
person
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 to
person
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. It is hardly seen that two people have the same meaning of
talent
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. Since childhood, what I was taught that whosoever is different from the others and has expertise or is extraordinary in what he or she is doing is their '
talent
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'. But after I grew up, I realised that
talent
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 mostly depends on your
interest
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.
Body paragraph 1
People have their own opinions where they say that they were born with the skills, but I believe that
its
it is
it's
 not something they are born with.
Its
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It's
 more towards how that
interest
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tranformed
given a completely different form or appearance
transformed
 into their passion. Whenever a child born, his or her brain is in a growing stage and can grasp up things easily.
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, if you see no parents have to teach their mother tongue to the kids
,
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,
it is something that they learn while hearing their parent's conversation or by watching television.
Body paragraph 2
When people say that they have expertise in something due to their rigorous efforts on what they are doing, it again comes to the journey from
interest
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 to passion.
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, many times it happens that a
person
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 is interested in doing
something but
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something, but
 after practising it multiple times, he or she is extraordinary from others.
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, a cricketer is always better than an ordinary
person
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 in cricket, because its his passion which lets him play the whole day and when compared to ordinary
person
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 he will play but not like few hours continuously.
Conclusion
In a nutshell, I would say that the though a child is born with something his/her
interest
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 is something that matters a lot. And so is the reason I believe that though they were born with specific skills, they still need to be taught how to be extraordinary in that field whether it is sports or music.

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