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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter: -Complain about the situation -Say why this is a problem -And propose ways to reduce the noise

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Dear Ms or Mrs, I am writing to
complaint
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 about your new campus
spread
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spreading
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high level
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high-level
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 sound around my residence. First of all, in your
accommodation
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accommodation,
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 you mentioned that all the apartments had
tranquil
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a tranquil
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 atmosphere. The problem was that the desk filled with amusement was working at night, so l could not feel
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sense of peace.
Moreover
, the situation gave
me
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apply
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negative influences
so as
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apply
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to study and work , at the same time, my daily life was upside down.
As well as
 I suggest some solutions to
made
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 the
situations
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 better. You minimize the volume of amplifiers in order not to carry
to
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them to
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 the outside of the nightclub building or lower the opening hours of your innovative service. I think
it is clear that
 your habitation was misleading.
As a result
, I would like a full refund because that was the worst
nights
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 l had ever had. I look forward to hearing a good explanation from you, Yours faithfully, Hayitova Gulbahor
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Task Response
To improve task response, ensure that you provide a more detailed explanation of why the situation is a problem and offer clear, concrete proposals to address the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your letter more logically, ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.
Tone
Although informal expressions in a letter to an authority figure are acceptable, strive for a more formal tone and precise vocabulary to enhance the professionalism of your complaint.
Content
You effectively communicated your complaint and suggested solutions, which is good practice in such letters.
Format
Your closing and greeting were appropriately structured, showing respect and formality.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • residence
  • incessant
  • disrupt
  • sleep pattern
  • well-being
  • academic performance
  • soundproofing
  • noise-canceling barriers
  • double-glazed windows
  • mitigate
  • operational hours
  • closure time
  • protocol
  • monitoring
  • conducive
  • swift resolution
  • emphasis
  • impact
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