Some people say that vertical city is best where people can live, while others say that horizontal cities are better. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

According to some people's preferences, the main reason for being successful in career is related to tertiary education.
However
, their opponents opt for choosing
job
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a job
after graduating the high school. The former thought is more sensible for me because of possessing enough chance to be recruited. More and more people tend to set up jobs for themselves just after finishing their studies at high school. May be they are considering only money related sides in mind
,
Accept space
,
instead
of continuing their academic life. It can bring more money for them so as to owning
multi
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a multi
-
flate
having a surface without slope, tilt in which no part is higher or lower than another
flat
float
houses or wealthy cars. It has
advantegous
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
side
,
Accept space
,
being more independent and becoming the breadwinner of their family
for instance
.
Moreover
, they are highly likely to increase their experience. The eldest child in family is prone to pursue
this
type of career. When it comes to people who chose
academic path
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the academic path
an academic path
they are likely to possess flourishing future. Because in well- developed countries commercial companies employ only well-educated and qualified
job
seekers for the managerial duties.
Such
group of people can be promoted for their enthusiasm and productivity in their field, I guess.
Furthermore
, there are always
higher level
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a higher level
of competition in
job market
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the job market
,
Accept space
,
so
most of employees who
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most employees who
are lacking some academic strategies correlated to their
job
will probably
left
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leave
their places for others, I think. Students, who have finished university or college studies with high marks as a foreigner recruited by "ZTE" company because of insufficient number of well- educated native student in China 2012. To conclude, both of way can be true for their owners because of
needs
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the needs
or
their
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they're
willing to continue tertiary education. In my view, it will be
smart choice
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a smart choice
the smart choice
.
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