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It is often said that government spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife,while there are other problems that are more important.do you agree or disagree?

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Government
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 plans an increasingly significant role in every field for development of their domestic world.It is always a
debateable
open to doubt or debate
debatable
 issue that
government
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 used
huge amount
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huge amounts
a huge amount
 of
money
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 for wild
animals
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animal
 projects for the protection of
wildlife
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.
However
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,
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,
there are numerous problems that are very essential.I agree with the given
statement but
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statement, but
 some extend.I will discuss it in upcoming sections.
To begin
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animals are crucial for our ecosystem and they
also
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 enhance the beauty of our environment.It is the responsibility of the
government
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 to spend
money
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 on animals so that they
also
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 live their
life
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 and easily survive.
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Moreover
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Moreover, government
government
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 should use
government
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 income for making policy in the favour of
wildlife
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.Animals
also
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 have the right of living a happy
life
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.
For instance
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,
the Hindu newspaper
always write
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always writes
 the article about
wildlife
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 protection as well as they encounter the human beings to do the same thing.
On the other hand
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, there are
large range
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a large range
 of other issues in
country
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countries
the country
 which are very essential rather than spending
money
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 on animals.
Firstly
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,
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,
individuals are unemployed due to
this
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 problem they cannot easily survive in their
life
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.
Secondly
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,
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,
other problems have serious matter
,
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,
individual claim that issues like unemployment
,
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,
pollution
,
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,
transportation related problems
,
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,
child labour and many more.These all are serious one and due to solve
this
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 cause
government
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 should take policies and spend
money
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 in
this
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 type of issues.
For example
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in many nation masses are very poor and they do not have
money
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 or home for living as well as they are hungry for many days.
This
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 is only created by the
neglection
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 of the
government
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. In conclusion
,
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,
in my point of
veiw
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
view
wildlife
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 is
important but
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important, but
humans
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human
human's
life
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 is more precious.
In addition
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,
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,
due to solve
this
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 issues
government
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 should spend on
money
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 on necessary things which is beneficial for human beings.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem
  • Human welfare
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable development
  • Preservation
  • Endangered species
  • Habitat destruction
  • Climate change
  • Environmental stewardship
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