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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear Karen, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to give you an update about the
match
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 that you missed
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 weekend because of your accident. On 2nd April
of
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2026, the cricket
match
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 was held between two groups
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 our area in the school playground. Our team has a strong batting line-up
and
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 they set a huge target of 325 runs.
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, the other group played very well
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 they won the
match
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 so easily because of having mature members in their team. The weather on that day was cloudy and rainy. It made the ground very soft and wet.
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, we were unable to perform well. I am impressed with the performance of both teams. No matter which team won
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match
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,
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I really enjoyed it. We missed you and your performance badly at
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match
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. I hope you will recover soon and return to take charge of your captaincy. Warm wishes, Sam

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task response
For task response: say a bit more about how you felt. For example, say if you were sad, excited, or proud.
task response
For task response: the match details are clear, but one part is not fully clear because you say your team set 325 runs and then say the other team won easily. Make this part more exact.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. But some link words can be better. Use simple links like so, but, and because in a more clear way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep one main idea in each part. The ideas are mostly clear, but a few lines can flow better.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task. You say who won, what the day was like, and how you felt.
task response
For task response: the tone is friendly and kind, which fits a letter to a friend in hospital.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter is easy to follow, with a greeting, body, and closing.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main job, so the reader can follow your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • win the match
  • final score
  • team spirit
  • rainy day
  • strong wind
  • wet ground
  • hard game
  • feel proud
  • feel nervous
  • quick recovery
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