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Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that it should become easier for them to study at universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, it is acknowledged that students from suburban areas find it tough to receive higher
education
. Whether it should be made easier for them to access
university
education
 becomes an ongoing concern, which incurs a highly-charged debate. Obviously, higher
education
 opportunities bring about benefits to students in multiple ways.
For example
, to receive higher
education
 becomes increasingly important to senior high school graduates, partly becasue it determines if they have the competitive edge in the job market, and partly because it is seen as a guarantee of a certain level of the mental ability, from the computer literacy
that is
 required by the most employers to the capacities of acquiring new knowledge the soonest possible which is valued by the most workplaces. With a
university
 degree, students from rural areas will obtain a job easily, thereby bettering their living conditions and their family as well. Higher
education
also
,
however
, tend to impose a heavy burden on their families since the relenting rise in the tuition fees which are - increasingly beyond those families’ ability to afford.
In addition
, with the mounting evidence, a
university
 degree is not always a guarantee of seizing a decent job;
therefore
, their living conditions are likely to worse off by not able to earn back their tuition fee after graduation. In
this
 way, some people argue, students from rural areas are not well-advised to pursue a
university
 degree. But I perceive their desire to
further
 their
education
 should not be disrespected and the government should subsidise them to receive higher
education
. In conclusion,
university
education
 should be made fair to everyone, predicated only on their academic performance and mental abilities, rather than their financial capacities and the government should subsidise those students in need.
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