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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed , in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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The United States is adopting preventive
safety
 for teenagers by restricting their movement during late
night
, unless there’s an adult with them. While it may to a certain extent contribute to their
safety
, it may
also
 hinder their independence.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of the ‘curfew’ imposed on adolescents, not allowing them outside unaccompanied at
night
. Imposing a curfew could lead to better
safety
 for teenagers. During the
night
, the streets become unsafe as a whole and especially for kids and adolescents as there are a lot of miscreants roaming in the streets.
For example
, there have been several cases in the news that in Arizona's unsafe neighbourhoods lots of kidnappings have been happening recently.
In addition
, drug junkies are on the loose at
night
, and in Detroit lots of cases of robberies and mugging
by
Suggestion
of
 them have come to light. For these reasons, it has been advised by several districts to restrict movement of teenagers outside the house at
night
.
Conversely
, there are times when adolescents may have to necessarily leave the house at
night
. There could be reasons for them working part-time after school, there could be a medical emergency for which they have to go to the hospital.
For example
, more than half the teenagers do a part time job after school hours in Iowa which leads to them returning home after dark. The curfew will just take away their independence and learn how to take responsibility for themselves. In conclusion, teenage
safety
 is a crucial issue in current times.
Although
, forcing a strict restriction on their movement at
night
 can be a solution to some extent, ultimately, it is the responsibility of the adolescent to ensure they behave responsibly and safely. So, rather than imposing restrictions, teaching responsible behaviour should be the priority.
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