Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that all adolescents should spend their time to get extra money by some jobs. I disagree with
this
perspective because I believe that teenagers should use their free time to support society as much as possible.
On the one hand, I accept that there are certain benefits of paying jobs for teens. In most developed countries, people tend to educate their children that they should be learned financial independence as soon as possible. Hence
, It would be very helpful for adolescents who might have the opportunity to get some money from a part-time job. For example
, A lot of American parents are willing to give their children make money by supporting family businesses such
as delivery, storage, and so on. In fact, getting paid jobs has a certain effect of encouraging and motivating teenagers to be more mature and responsible.
At the same time, I would agree that young adults should contribute small efforts to their community by working as a volunteer, perhaps taking part in some non-government institutions about the environment or organization in reducing plastic rubbish campaign and so on. I believe that in this
way teenagers might have chances to gain necessary experiences and useful skills for their future as well as support their own society. For example
, Greta Thunberg a well-known environmental activist, against climate change as well as global warming issues not only in Sweden but also
around the world, She is just 16-year-old, with her efforts, she generated a lot of pressure for political experts of the major nations on reflecting their own actions on serious environmental issues. Personally, I suppose that a tiny contribution might have a much greater impact on society
In conclusion, young teenagers might have a range of opportunities to seek a well-paid job, but in my opinion, Parents should encourage their children finding a meaningful work for our communities.Submitted by Tiến Hùng on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite