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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, there is an ongoing debate on how to give appropriate
punishment
 to people who are accused with criminal activities. Some people hold the view that every kind of
crime
 should have the same
punishment
, while others assert that each
crime
 should be judged according to its background reasons that cause criminals to commit crimes.
Therefore
, I will discuss both sides and state my opinion. It can never be denied that a fixed
punishment
 for each type of
crime
 brings out many pros.
First
, it allows the judges to make quick decisions about what kind of
punishment
 that the criminals should deserve due to the pre-set standard,
consequently
, there may be less time and costs spent on court proceedings.
In addition
, the decreasing
crime
 rate can be possibly seen in
this
 case. To be specific, taking the same harsh punishments
such
 as the death penalty and life imprisonment into consideration, many people are not likely to commit crimes easily because of severe costs.
On the other hand
, others advocate the circumstances and motivation of an individual
crime
 should be a priority when determining the penalty.
To begin
 with, it is actually unfair to give each kind of
crime
 the same
punishment
, because the motives for crimes can vary greatly even in similar criminal cases.
For instance
, some criminals commit murderer deliberately, while others are forced to kill for self-defending. If they receive the same penalty, the justice of the law would be neglected, and chances are that hundreds of people would protest against the judgement, which resulting in the outbreak of social unrest. In a short term, I agree that the same standard of punishments can benefit the court procedure as well as decrease the
crime
 rate to a certain degree.
However
, we should
also
 note that it is more likely to pose threat to the stability of our society in the long run.
Therefore
, I approve of the latter, which in essence respects the justice of law and human rights.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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