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Your colleague has invited you to his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to the friend. Explain the situation, Say why you will not be attending, Say something about the period you have worked together and his/her work.

#colleague #farewell #party #friend #situation #period #work
Dear Jass, I hope you're doing great. I'
m
 quite excited since I received an invitation to your farewell party; unfortunately, I'
m
 writing
this
 letter with a heavy heart as I'
m
 not able to be a part of your special day on 20th March. As you know, I'
m
 living far away from my family and
also
 have to make arrangements for my only sister's marriage because I've all the responsibilities on my shoulders. So, I've to go back home next month. Attending both events on the same day is next to impossible for me.
Furthermore
, I already booked the flight ticket for India which is not refundable. I vividly remember that we worked for two years together as project coordinators at Abc Industries. Working with you gave me a chance to learn many skills as you've much more experience than me. I can't even forget your extraordinary methodologies to solve the problems in the projects. Hope you would understand my situation and I wish you good luck for your bright future. See you soon and take care. Best regards, Tajinder Singh
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coherence cohesion
To further improve coherence and cohesion, you could consider using more diverse linking words and phrases to enhance the flow between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a clear main idea at the beginning, and develop that idea fully before moving on to the next point.
task achievement
For even better task achievement, include more details about why your presence at the farewell party would have been significant, which adds depth to your reasoning for not attending.
task achievement
Reflect on your colleague's influence on you more extensively to personalize the letter further, conveying your regret at not being able to attend the party.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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