Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere? To what extent to do you agree with this view?

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There are some people who often consider that investing in

arts

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the arts

is an unwanted move taken by the

government

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, in their opinion, spending money on essential services is crucial. In my opinion, spending on arts

sector

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also

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essential.

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, spending some money on

arts

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the arts

should never be considered as a waste of resources. People should realise that arts

sector

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has a major role in showcasing a nation’s tradition, culture and uniqueness of the native people or community. Visual arts and literary arts depict the talents of our poets, writers, linguists and painters.

Theatrical performance

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A theatrical performance

Theatrical performances

by musicians, drama actors, dancers and filmmakers is recognised globally and is recommended for most respectable awards.

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, in India the musician A. R. Rahman won / has won an Oscar award, for his work in the movie named “Slumdog millionaire”. Since the Oscar award is the most prestigious award, it was the proudest moment for every Indian when it was conferred on an Indian. I would say the

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should take steps to discover the young talents and bring them

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into

the limelight.

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, investing in the arts

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could really help in improving the revenue of tourism. The art galleries, paintings and literary

work exhibitions

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work, exhibitions

attract many tourists thereby making the country a hotspot for global tourism.

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, Kurukshetra in India is a famous tourist attraction.

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became popular among foreign tourists because of the legendary description about the war that took place there many decades ago in a famous literary epic “Mahabharath”.

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, these literary and visual arts contribute majorly in tourism revenue. To summarise, I appreciate that the

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focuses on essential public sectors for the people’s welfare. But I would say that the

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should allocate enough funds for the arts

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as well to prevent it from perishing.

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enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
needs of the majority

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