In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Urbanization
has been a debatable topic in the world because it has been impacting the numbers of
population
in rural
areas
. The advantages of shifting
population
in the
city
are better job
opportunities
and facilities than in rural
areas
.
However
, the decreasing number of
people
that live in urban
areas
would bring some burden
such
as the strain on urban infrastructure. I wholeheartedly argue that
urbanization
brings more negative effects.
People
tend to move from rural
areas
to the cities to obtain better job
opportunities
and accommodation
such
as healthcare and education.
This
happens
due to
the fact that the advancement of facilities in urban
areas
is quicker than in rural
areas
and obviously, better amenities would ease
people
in their daily lives.
For example
, in Gunung Kidul, Indonesia, job
opportunities
for
people
with IT backgrounds are limited because
this
area is not an industrialized area,
thus
almost 40% of locals are moving to the
city
.
Although
the facilities and
opportunities
in the
city
are better than in rural
areas
, rural-to-urban migration is not the only solution because there are negative sides to the
population
shift. The
population
shift makes the
population
in
countryside
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decrease and it
consequently
burdens the society because they lack of
population
in productive ages.
While
there are more chances in urban, the countryside itself has a basic livelihood that needs
young
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age and with
urbanization
, there are limited
people
to help with the work.
For instance
, in Gunung Kidul, Yogyakarta, where most
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folks are farmers, they need young age to help with the land,
however
, most of the citizens move to
city
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and the land is left abandoned.
To conclude
,
urbanization
has both positive and negative impacts.
While
urban cities provide better amenities, it would be strained because of the rural-to-urban migration.
Therefore
, the equality of the development of infrastructure would be a better workaround for
people
in rural
areas
because they could access what they need without moving to the
city
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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