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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Interpersonal communication, that has been an intrinsic part of human life throughout history, today, has become easier than ever before owing to the advent of
smartphones
.
Nevertheless
, these gadgets are often said to be undermining social bonds among people, by,
for instance
, eliminating the need for face-to-face communication. I completely disagree that
smartphones
 negatively impact people's relationships. Analysing how they facilitate communication and help us broaden our social circle will prove
this
 thesis true.
To begin
 with, high end cell phones have eradicated all barriers for people to interact with each other.
For example
, by using apps,
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and IMO that most modern mobile devices incorporate, we can instantly contact our relatives and friends regardless of our location. Just a century ago,
however
, it took several weeks or more for a message to reach its destination, and double that time to receive a response.
This
 indicates that
smartphones
 foster more social intercourse, which can, in turn, consolidate interpersonal relationships.
Secondly
,
smartphones
 provide their users with scope for making new acquaintances, because they have Internet access. By utilizing social networking sites,
such
 as WhatsApp, We Chat and Reddit, we not only can acquire some useful information, but
also
 meet a lot of new people
.
Accept space
.
To illustrate, I have been actively using Facebook Messenger for roughly 3 years, and now I have well over 20 friends from around the world. All
this
 means that, contrary to what many people think,
smartphones
 have encouraged more social interaction. Overall, it is my feeling that
smartphones
 have augmented socialization among people. Today they enable us to converse with others no matter where we are and build new contacts. It is predicted that these gadgets will make our social lives even more comfortable in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limit
  • face-to-face communication
  • social media
  • loss of real connections
  • distract
  • engaging
  • empathy
  • personal connection
  • addictive
  • isolation
  • enhance
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