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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Why every youngsters do need to be tolerated in many things? Many parts of the USA, during a
curfew
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, government
do not allow
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does not allow
 youths to go to
outside
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the outside
 without
guardian
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a guardian
, especially after dusk. I believe that they should be under observation when they are alone. Ideas enunciated
further
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 in my discourse will support my point of view. Though children have rights to enjoy their lives, but their safety is too important.
To begin
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 with, juveniles cannot take care of themselves, they are still young and they do not understand their ethical responsibilities. They are just like an innocent deer in the jungle who runs everywhere, who plays everywhere and
funs
a device for creating a current of air by movement of a surface or surfaces
fans
everywhere but
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everywhere, but
 does not alert against the wild hunter animals. So, keeping
such
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 candid children free without any parental attention is not a precise decision,
instead
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 they should be kept under guardian surveillance so that even by mistaken they cannot
do
engage in
make
 mistakes. What the
curfew
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 means? Moving forward, whenever some circumstances are not controlled easily,
such
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 as riots, pandemic or plague,
Government
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the Government
 has the only way, to control
this
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, which is
curfew
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. During the
curfew
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, the cities fall under silent. A dog is not
either seen
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seen either
. In
such
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 condition, anyone can take advantage like robbery, especially after dark. So, allowing
teenagers especially
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teenagers, especially
 during the night could lead to danger and sometimes it could life threatening too. If the children accompanied by a custodian,
such
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 situation can be avoided. If there is any need that requires them to go outside, before sending them outside, we should alert them about
such
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 conditions. We should provide them some self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 objects like pepper spray, beeper and tactical flashlight. To summarize, though they are children, we should not make them feel like they are still young,
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, we should make them realized of their ethical responsibilities. So that if
such
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 emergency situation happens like
curfew
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, they can take
decision
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decisions
a decision
 by themselves.
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