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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #countryside #city
Some people tend to believe that it is better for children to grow up in the
countryside
 than in a big
city
. I totally disagree
this
 statement. I consider that the
life
 in a big
city
 gives a person more opportunities than in a
countryside
. I mean the variety of
education
, extra curriculum activities, fun activities, medicine and the confidence of getting a better job.
Firstly
, teachers in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 are not as qualified as teachers in cities.
Moreover
, some of them even have not graduated from a university. It means, they cannot create the necessary kind of
education
. It is all known fact that the
education
 plays a very important role
in person’s
Suggestion
in a person’s life
life
. It is the basement of our future
life
. Without a good
education
 it will be rather difficult to get a good payed job and to be successful.
Secondly
, children in cities are lucky to have a variety of extra curriculum activities
such
 as sports, art, hobby clubs, dance schools, gyms, and many others. It gives them a great opportunity to try everything in
life
, to be
openminded
Suggestion
open minded
for
Suggestion
to
 different things. One more reason to choose a big
city
 for a child is that a
city
 provides better
live
Suggestion
life
 conditions and services
such
 as medical, dental, etc. For inhabitants of a
countryside it
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countryside, it
 is always more difficult to get a better medical help. To conclude, personally I would prefer
life
 in a
city
 for my children to give them better
education
, medical help and an opportunity of getting a better job.
Submitted by Ekaterina Savchenko on

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