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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #countryside #city
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Some people tend to believe that it is better for children to grow up in the
countryside
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 than in a big
city
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. I totally disagree
this
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 statement. I consider that the
life
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 in a big
city
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 gives a person more opportunities than in a
countryside
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. I mean the variety of
education
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, extra curriculum activities, fun activities, medicine and the confidence of getting a better job.
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, teachers in
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countryside
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the countryside
 are not as qualified as teachers in cities.
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, some of them even have not graduated from a university. It means, they cannot create the necessary kind of
education
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. It is all known fact that the
education
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 plays a very important role
in person’s
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in a person’s life
life
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. It is the basement of our future
life
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. Without a good
education
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 it will be rather difficult to get a good payed job and to be successful.
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, children in cities are lucky to have a variety of extra curriculum activities
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 as sports, art, hobby clubs, dance schools, gyms, and many others. It gives them a great opportunity to try everything in
life
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, to be
openminded
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open minded
for
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to
 different things. One more reason to choose a big
city
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 for a child is that a
city
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 provides better
live
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life
 conditions and services
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 as medical, dental, etc. For inhabitants of a
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countryside it
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countryside, it
 is always more difficult to get a better medical help. To conclude, personally I would prefer
life
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 in a
city
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 for my children to give them better
education
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, medical help and an opportunity of getting a better job.
Submitted by Ekaterina Savchenko on

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