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Many people think that the government should pay the tuition fees of all adults who are interested in university studies. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #tuition #fees #adults #university #studies
as our
education
 system
has
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university
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the university
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 level,
student
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students
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 can apply for
university
 for
further
 learning. and many people think that
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the
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government support the
tuition
fee
. as
every one
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everyone
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 is equal
about
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in
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 the chance of
education
. many people think that
education
 should give
equal
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an equal
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 chance to every person who is
citizen
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a citizen
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. and
this
 policy is not for
every one
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everyone
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, but just for only the adult who are interested in
university
 studies. it means that it's
kind
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a kind
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 of investment
on
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in
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 human
resource
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resources
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who
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that
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 will be the fundamental of
country
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the country
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.
on the other hand
,
budget
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the budget
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 is limited. if
government
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the government
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 should afford all
tuition
fee
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fees
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,
government
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the government
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 should cut some budget from other departments'
budget
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budgets
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which might be essential. and we can get almost all
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 that society
require
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requires
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 for us from the
education
 from high school. so only a few people need
further
 and detailed knowledge
for
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of
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 their business field.
lastely
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lately
lastly
, with
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scholarships
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scholarship
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scholarship,
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 we can run
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the university
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university
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universities
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 more efficiently. if the
tuition
fee
 is free, there will be no more competition and it will bring lower-equalization.
as
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 far as i
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am concern
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concern
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, in
this
case
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case,
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efficiancy
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efficiency
 is more important than equality. and to make an
efficent
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efficient
university
education
 system scholarship is better than free
tuition
fee
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fees
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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