In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Due to an increase of elderly in various parts of the world, leading to the larger amount of money spent on medical management. It is argued that whether the citizen ought to pay for their
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centre parallel to hospitals by state funds On the one hand, the elderly, especially, who don’t have the ability to make money because of retirements, have the basic right to be treated freely.
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, lacking of governments’ support, public
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might be affected by spread diseases. Vietnam during COVID-19 is an example of patients, especially the labour class who has an inability to afford
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care the greater burdens on taxpayers.
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