Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

It has been argued by many that keeping a car is more troublesome rather than
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
ease
Correct your spelling
easy
show examples
. I totally disagree with
this
, as the vehicle not only reduces the distances
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
but has
also
made our lives comfortable. On the one hand, the current era of science and technology has increased the pace of life, as one has to travel long distances to earn the bread and butter.
This
is not possible without owning a ride, as it's the need of
hour
Correct article usage
an hour
show examples
today and I
also
believe the same. Keeping a
trouble free
Add a hyphen
trouble-free
show examples
motorcar has become a necessity, as it helps us to move about and cover the long journeys within hours.
Moreover
, we can discover new places, visit our relatives and perform our duties in
far flung
Add a hyphen
far-flung
show examples
areas without hesitation and discomfort.
For instance
,
according to
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
research in the USA, about 80% of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Americans
owns
Correct subject-verb agreement
own
show examples
a transport to earn their living.
On the other hand
, there is a belief that
this
modern transportation system has made
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
individuals lazy and increased the incidence of heart diseases.
Secondly
, there is an enormous rise in pollution
due to
heavy traffic.
Furthermore
, there is an exponential increase in roadside accidents, thereby not only making the persons crippled
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
but has
also
overburdened the health budget.
For example
, the French government has introduced a law that only
single
Correct article usage
a single
show examples
sedan can be bought by a family of four persons and that too
an
Correct article usage
a
show examples
Eco friendly one.
To conclude
, apart from many drawbacks, the car has become a basic necessity in order to stay abreast with the speed of the world and to have
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
hassle free
Add a hyphen
hassle-free
show examples
travelling.
Submitted by doctor.awaisalikhan on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Improve the structure of your essay to make your points more clear and coherent. Use a clear introduction and conclusion to summarize your arguments and ensure your main points are well-supported throughout the essay.
task achievement
You need to fully address the prompt and ensure that you are providing a clear and comprehensive response. Use relevant specific examples to support your ideas and ensure that your ideas are well-developed and presented clearly.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: