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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

It has been argued by many that keeping a car is more troublesome rather than
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ease
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. I totally disagree with
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, as the vehicle not only reduces the distances
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 but has
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 made our lives comfortable. On the one hand, the current era of science and technology has increased the pace of life, as one has to travel long distances to earn the bread and butter.
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 is not possible without owning a ride, as it's the need of
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 today and I
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 believe the same. Keeping a
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 motorcar has become a necessity, as it helps us to move about and cover the long journeys within hours.
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, we can discover new places, visit our relatives and perform our duties in
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 areas without hesitation and discomfort.
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research in the USA, about 80% of
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Americans
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 a transport to earn their living.
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, there is a belief that
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 modern transportation system has made
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individuals lazy and increased the incidence of heart diseases.
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, there is an enormous rise in pollution
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 heavy traffic.
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, there is an exponential increase in roadside accidents, thereby not only making the persons crippled
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 but has
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 overburdened the health budget.
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, the French government has introduced a law that only
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 sedan can be bought by a family of four persons and that too
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 Eco friendly one.
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, apart from many drawbacks, the car has become a basic necessity in order to stay abreast with the speed of the world and to have
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hassle free
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 travelling.

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