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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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In recent years, online shopping has become increasingly popular. People are buying online
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. Buying online
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 shopping.
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 online shopping trend has both positive and negative impacts for both individuals and companies. In terms of advantages, online shopping is more convenient than
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 shopping. People can save a lot of time because they do not have to spend hours driving to the store and walking around looking for the right.
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, people can
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 save their money. They can find a cheaper product in an online store without travelling.
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 means people can save both time and money. Companies
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 online shopping. The companies can save money on rentals, and they don’t need to hire more employees. In the case of disadvantages, when people buy something
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, they usually see the quality, design and size of the item before they buy it. People may not be able to see and feel what they get before purchasing in an online store. For the companies,
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 the customer can request for a replacement or refund, it takes time to process. Companies
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 encounter problems from online sales. When the buyers give bad reviews, they affect the sales of the products. There is more risk that your information will be stolen online. When everyone is shopping online, they usually have to give their personal information. The hacker can access the information and steal it.
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 shopping is safer than online shopping. In conclusion, online shopping has advantages and disadvantages.
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, it is better if you research to find a trustworthy shop before purchasing. While each company must guarantee the quality of their products to compete against other marketplaces.
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