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People today rarely interact with their neighbors, and this is having a harmful effect on local communities. What are the possible causes of this trend? What can be done to address it?

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It is true that nowadays people are very busy with their own life and they are not frequently communicating with their neighbours. For local residents, it is affecting negatively and in my opinion, there are two main factors to
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 trend and solutions can be done by
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 with, there are two main contributors to the rare interaction of people with their neighbours.
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, thanks to the technology advancement people are spending a huge amount of their
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 in the social media,
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 as Facebook, Twitter and other most popular websites and platforms.
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, they have not enough
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 for communication with their neighbours, and it negatively effects on human interaction.
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, another cause might be people’s
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, because most of the people
work
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 from morning to evening and after hard
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 at
work
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 they do not want to interact with anyone even with their family members.
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, If
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 causes keep its existence, it would spoil people’s communication and friendship with their neighbours.
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, in my view,
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government
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the government
 could tackle
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 problem. If
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government
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the government
 reduces the amount of
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 that people spend at
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, it would good chance for people to allocate
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 for their neighbours and keep their relationship with them. Another the most effective way to encourage people to interact with their neighbours is different kind of gatherings
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 aimed to strengthen friendship and peace with local communities.
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,
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 could throw a party, or encourages sport competitions for local communities in order to enhance cooperation and promote friendship among local people. In conclusion, it seems to me that there are two most important reasons for
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 trend
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 aforementioned and
government
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 solely responsible for the solution of
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 problem.

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