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Mobile phones have brought both benefits and drawbacks to phone users. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

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In the modern society, the issue of using a mobile
phone
 is a topic of controversy. Some people argue that using mobile
phone
 might cause some problems.
Although
 there are some drawbacks of
this
 trend, I would believe that there are far more benefits. On the one hand, there are some negatives when mobile phones are used more by people.
To begin
 with, using cell phones during people’s activities. During an important conference or public places, calling or receiving
phone
 calls would distract our attention and decrease quality meetings.
For instance
, ringing phones cause a disturbance in cinemas and
thus
 it might make others feel nasty.
Furthermore
, if children spent more time on their phones to chat or play games rather than study, their performance at school would drop notably. They
also
 spend almost their time using the mobile
phone
 for playing video games or watching cartoons, which could result in losing the habit of participating in physical activities
On the other hand
, despite the negatives I mentioned above, I believe that these drawbacks are out-weighted by the benefits.
First
 of all, mobile phones change the way people maintain effective communication with colleagues. In
this
 modern era, people are more likely to use mobile phones as the mean of communication. Thank mobile phones help people can stay in touch with family, friends, and colleagues wherever we are.
Secondly
, with advanced modern technology, mobile phones have many entertainment applications.
For example
, we can access the internet faster, listen to music, enjoy playing video games, take beautiful photos, or even watch a movie smoothly. In conclusion, while I recognize some disadvantages of
this
 trend, I still believe that these drawbacks are overshadowed by the benefits of the above-mentioned arguments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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