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The government should not spend money on arts as this money would be better spent on other projects like sanitation and infrastructure. Do you agree with the statement.

#government #money #arts #projects #sanitation #infrastructure
It is believed that
investing
Suggestion
investment
investor
 funds in
arts
Suggestion
the arts
 is not advantageous and there are more pressing issues on earth that are needed to be addressed by the higher authorities. I completely disagree with the above statement and believe that
art
 is worth every single penny that are spent on them.
This
 essay shall present pertinent description and instances of the view. There are several reasons why
government
Suggestion
the government
 should spend money on
art
. The most preponderant one lies in the fact that
Art
 reflects the culture of the
country
 and promotes better understanding of the culture and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 heritage among people. There are numerous museum all over the world preserved by the
government
 and people who are
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
 can visit there free of cost as maintenance is undertaken by the
government
.
For instance
,
canada
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
, USA, Australia have
arts
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art
 museum all over the
country
 that exhibits ancient artefacts.
In addition
 to
this
, allocating money to the development and sustenance of
art
 boosts
country's economy
Suggestion
the country's economy
.
Art
 galleries can attract tourists from all over the globe and in turn generates huge revenue.
Morover
in addition
Moreover
, the
art
 sector employs many people.
For example
, artists from various genres have huge fan followings and they are a vital part of various
art
 shows which in turn provide employment to hundreds of people. Without
government
 funding many
art
 form will die and
this
 will be
a
Suggestion
an
 extreme loss of the
country
. To conclude, though infrastructure and sanitation have enormous
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 and needs to be
addressed but
Accept comma addition
addressed, but
 not the expense of
art
 because
art
 has its own value and profits to both people and the
country
.
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