Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that advertising aimed at kids should be
canceled
(of events) no longer planned or scheduled
cancelled
. Others see that advertising is not a must to get banned. But why do some people want to cancel the kids' advertising? There are a couple of reasons that a group wants to ban advertising for kids: some adversaries can cross a certain boundary for some cultures-making it offensive- and another reason is that people believe that it can make children want things in the adversity that their parents cannot afford for them, making the kids sad. Crossing a certain culture's boundaries can affect the advertisers and the kids in bad ways. Of course, it would demolish the sales of the company in the offended culture, but for kids who do not understand fully what the cultures are, it can grow inside of them the disrespect for that culture. But not only theses kids are the ones who are going to be affected by
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advertising, but
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children from different cultures, if they can understand that it is offensive, the adversary can encourage them to bully some children from other cultures. There is
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a huge number of parents who have some financial issues, so if their children saw an adversary,
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, highly-priced chocolate, they would tell their parents to get it for them. And here comes the problem of the money, the parents can not afford to buy it for them, making the kids sad, or if they get it to them, to put a smile on their faces, they are going to have more financial issues, which is
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bad. In conclusion, the kids' advertising should be banned, or
get
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gets
highly supervised by different entities.
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