In many parts of the world, children are given more freedom than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development?

"Technology" and "digitalization" are the two terms that have strong intimacy with each other, which in turn, have made the big difference between our past and present life and that difference in modernization will
further
extend more conspicuously which, at present day, reminding us to beware and cautious for the changes that could be clement or inclement.
Ofcourse
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Of course
, as by instinct, we have no other choices left but to convert those changes and challenges in the most likely way that we want for our
survival which
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survival, which
is a lot more dominated by the processes and decisions on what we are doing for our pipeline products or progenies.
Hence
, we must need to think
for
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of
about
our children. If we want to make a comparison between past and present,
first
we need to contemplate on some vibrant changes. Now, it's very much easily understandable what IT has done is absolutely revolutionary which our past generations simply cannot think about in their early adolescence.
Therefore
, some
freedom
will come automatically and
simultaneously which
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simultaneously, which
I want to mark as "Automated IT Independence" that,
at
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in
our present era, we cannot but embrace it only to get along with the vibe well. So, inherently and in their process of growth and development, both physical and psychological, youngsters will enjoy
freedom
more or less not in many
parts but
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parts, but
in every
parts
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part
of the world that I believe personally in comparison with analogue age. Here, the nagging feeling comes in our minds, will it be a positive,
humankind
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humankind's
boosting development or a terrifying, boorish act to decelerate moral prospects? Well, let's simplify it. Actually, it depends on us, on how we guide our young generation amidst that exciting period of tech-flourished disposition. It's very right for them to be confounded between right and wrong, because the line of demarcation has become very vague,
as a result
of excessive
freedom
and open-minded,
damncaring
tendency.
In addition
with
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to
that, they, because of their tech-derived arrogance, driving themselves towards pitfall of darkness. Life is a series of events, where we face
ups
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the ups
and downs and we acclimatize ourselves with the drawbacks as we were taught to accept restraints whenever necessary
instead
of refusing it for want of
freedom
and that was the responsibility that our elders took for us. In
similar sense
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a similar sense
, our children should be driven towards light not darkness by us through proper instruction to them for their positive development.
Therefore
, to conclude, I reiterate that
freedom
with proper guidance can
turnish
make dirty or spotty, as by exposure to air; also used metaphorically
tarnish
turns
negativity of our descendents.
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